“Respect the native language patterns as much as we can”
What about respecting the target language as well?
Here is a sentence from an episode I’m working on right now:
“Because of the numerous obstacles you’ve created, it’s hard to get over them.”
Obviously someone was trying to be respectful to the structure of Korean here.
I would change it to:
"You have created so many obstacles that now it’s hard to get over them. "
and
Whenever I go to Seoul, of all the words we’ve spoken,
I only see your smiling face.
(Is a smiling face part of the words?)